Riding the Madrid Metro
1.
I didn’t see the band get on
The mum and dad
Both wearing Disney shirts and their kids tied to games machines
The old woman I stood for, after trying to read the metro poetry
Yes; I saw them
But I didn’t see the band get on
I heard and stood across from the giggling girls talking in Portugese
I saw them
But then the band put to play
2.
The band of Indians
Peruvian?-They’d skipped the ponchos…
I hadn’t been prepared for the band getting on
Hadn’t seen them put to play
I had been thinking of you of course
Of our newly found love
Of how to change this
Make that work what I should do
The details and such
They put to sing in that dark hole of the heights
3.
And the band got on and I knew of the depths
That she and I had fallen
Of the coffin nails driven deep into what was a marriage
Of my broken nails in my attempts to free us both
Of her despair
And they sang in that hole of the heights
Of joy and hardship
They knew of the yearning of the exiled
Of the long distance of a view
4.
And I thought of you my new love
And I remembered
That the winds will blow And thought I don’t mind
For it is of you, not the details or such, that they sang
As now I’ll be ready for the winds to rage
And for the screaming distance of a view
I saw that the Portugese girls were laughing
As before me they’d noticed I’d put to cry
Sweet salt water tears
I could no longer hide when the band got on
Dude, this one blew me away. It was beautiful.
Cheers – yep he has done himself proud with this one – I keep telling him to sort a blog out but these poetic types…….
Wow! I echo what El Guapo said. I know I hit the ‘like’ button, but I loved this!
Thanks Sandy.
Fantastic writing. That music can draw a heart out.
Agreed. Thanks Kate.
this is a poetry of substance, striking metaphors – thank you Ginger!
Many thanks Eliza.
I find myself refraining from my usual frivolous style of response and instead find myself tipping my simian hat to some fine writing.
Thanks.
Excellent. Enough said.
Red.
Cheers – nice to hear from you.
I like it. The use of ‘put to’ puzzles me a bit though. Why did you use that construction, out of interest?
Thanks for the positive.
As for the words they kinda just came tumbling out. upstairs on a park bench from the metro stop I’d stumbled out’ve. Plumb in the centre Madrid, knowing I’d to catch what had just happened. I’d finished about 21 days of walking on the Camino De Santiago. All those colours; to then be in a hole, thinking of someone I’d just met, after such a long time of a smashed thing. Put to…ummm…donno… it worked better than started to, a tad archaic/awkward mabey, words that fit….there’s the rub…
Ps I was a bit of a smart arse with someone who was kind enough to post a while ago.
Mea culpa, mea culpa, mea maxima culpa.
Thanks again.
Emotional and brilliant. A tip of the cap for this one!
Cheers